Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable
Corrected: The Titanic, once believed to be unsinkable, carried more than 1,500 people to their graves.
Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land
Corrected: Because the student teacher arrives next week; it is necessary to finish reading Eliot's long poem, The Waste Land.
DOL 26
Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly
Corrected: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the Atlantic Monthly, a renowned magazine.
Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library
Corrected: "I am very eager to read the French novel, The Plague," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library."
DOL 27
Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations
Corrected: Everyone in this grade is resonsible for this year's dance; therefore, we all must raise funds for the decorations.
Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner
Corrected: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.
DOL 28
Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet
Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing
DOL 29-32 SKIP
DOL 33
Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Corrected: When are these books due? Hans, should I bring them to the library? Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was
ratified
Corrected: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.
DOL 34
Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain
Corrected: Much depends on whether you're affected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain.
Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier
Corrected: While half the class use the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian Magazine that are different than the ones we used earlier.
DOL 35
Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft
Corrected: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report, because everyone doesn't have a copy of Marie's draft.
Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming
Corrected: My mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.
DOL 36
Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated
Corrected: "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal, stated.
Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think
Corrected: The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for me and my mom.
DOL 37
Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)
ms paula jeffers
campton paper company
18376 river drive
minneaplois mn
dear ms jeffers
Ms. Paula Jeffers
Campton Paper Company
18376 River Drive
Minneapolis, MN
Dear Ms. Jeffers,
DOL 38
Sentence 1L
DOL 39
Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner
Correction: To be allowed to go to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help my Mom fix dinner.
Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29
Correction: Mr. Corazzini, who can never start his car, took the bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.
DOL 40
Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico
Correction: Luisa bought an antique pitcher for her cousin, who is in Atlanta, in Mexico.
Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry
Correction: Oscar, please put these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.
Sentence 1: the titanic carried more then 1,500 people to there graves it was believed to by unsinkable
Corrected: The Titanic, once believed to be unsinkable, carried more than 1,500 people to their graves.
Sentence 2: the student teacher arrives next week it is necessary that we finishes reading eliots long poem the waste land
Corrected: Because the student teacher arrives next week; it is necessary to finish reading Eliot's long poem, The Waste Land.
DOL 26
Sentence 1: a renowned magazine many well known writers submit articles and stories to the atlantic monthly
Corrected: Many well known writers submit articles and stories to the Atlantic Monthly, a renowned magazine.
Sentence 2: i am very eager to read the french novel the plague carmen said but its not in our library
Corrected: "I am very eager to read the French novel, The Plague," Carmen said, "but it's not in our library."
DOL 27
Sentence 1: everyone in this grade are responsible for this years dance therefore we all must raise funds for the decorations
Corrected: Everyone in this grade is resonsible for this year's dance; therefore, we all must raise funds for the decorations.
Sentence 2: having worked for 8 hours i need to set down listen to music and the enjoyment of a good dinner
Corrected: Having worked for eight hours, I need to sit down, listen to music, and enjoy a good dinner.
DOL 28
Sentence 1: i remember when my neighbor he set up a huge telescope the larger i had ever seen to observe halleys comet
Sentence 2: ms masayo asked do you feel alright now walter or dont you want to go skiing
DOL 29-32 SKIP
DOL 33
Sentence 1: when are these books due hans should i bringn them to the library
Corrected: When are these books due? Hans, should I bring them to the library?
Sentence 2: after the constitutional convention of 1787 drafted the constitution of the united states almost 3 years passed before it was
ratified
Corrected: After the Constitutional Convention of 1787 drafted the Constitution of the United States, almost three years passed before it was ratified.
DOL 34
Sentence 1: much depends on weather your effected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain
Corrected: Much depends on whether you're affected by the high altitude when you climbed the mountain.
Sentence 2: while half the class uses the Internet the rest will study the smithsonian magazines that re different than the ones we used earlier
Corrected: While half the class use the Internet, the rest will study the Smithsonian Magazine that are different than the ones we used earlier.
DOL 35
Sentence 1: oh we havent got finished with our group book report the reason is because everyone dont have a copy of marie's draft
Corrected: Oh, we haven't finished our group book report, because everyone doesn't have a copy of Marie's draft.
Sentence 2: since my Mom likes canoeing on the yellowstone river hikes in montana and camps in wyoming
Corrected: My mom likes canoeing on the Yellowstone River, hiking in Montana, and camping in Wyoming.
DOL 36
Sentence 1: there are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice mrs ahmed the new principal stated
Corrected: "There are some athletes who rarely play but continue to practice," Mrs. Ahmed, the new principal, stated.
Sentence 2: the world series although often exciting sometimes is to slow paced for me and my mom we think
Corrected: The World Series, although often exciting, sometimes is too slow paced for me and my mom.
DOL 37
Sentence 1: (this is the heading to a letter - I will explain)
ms paula jeffers
campton paper company
18376 river drive
minneaplois mn
dear ms jeffers
Ms. Paula Jeffers
Campton Paper Company
18376 River Drive
Minneapolis, MN
Dear Ms. Jeffers,
DOL 38
Sentence 1L
DOL 39
Sentence 1: to be allowed to to to the party i had to finish my science project cleaning my room and helping my Mom fix dinner
Correction: To be allowed to go to the party, I had to finish my science project, clean my room, and help my Mom fix dinner.
Sentence 2: mr corazzini who cant never start his car was taken by bus too dulles airport on tuesday october 29
Correction: Mr. Corazzini, who can never start his car, took the bus to Dulles Airport on Tuesday, October 29.
DOL 40
Sentence 1: luisa bought a antique pitcher for her cousin who is in atlanta which had came from mexico
Correction: Luisa bought an antique pitcher for her cousin, who is in Atlanta, in Mexico.
Sentence 2: oscar please sit these books on the library table if you dont have alot of things to carry
Correction: Oscar, please put these books on the library table if you don't have a lot of things to carry.